How Can It Be?

January 14, 2014

I sailed on courageously
Propelled, by a wisp of affection
Spawned by a shade
Of bright evergreen
Uncovered in my ceaseless roaming

It dawned with grace
So fair and eternal
Cradled by sight
As her path curved toward mine

Afflicted
I cascaded ever slightly
Gradually giving way
At each loving verse dispensed

Against the breeze
That carried my voyage
I fondly relinquished
Fogged with hopefulness
Blissfully unaware
So blindly set and sure

3 responses to “How Can It Be?”

Iris Orpi

January 14, 2014

So smooth and sensual, almost breathless. You have imbued nature scenes with all-too-human passion and desire. I also very much loved how you merely hinted that you were headed for some form of heartbreak, but did not exactly end the poem in resolution. Instead it was suspended in weightlessness, returning the focus on your romantic imagery. Smooth!

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1. loftydreams101
  
  January 14, 2014
  
  Why thank you so much for this thorough critique! I’m glad you enjoyed my work 🙂 – Cheers.
  
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  1. Iris Orpi
    
    January 14, 2014
    
    The pleasure is all mine. Flow on, and keep taking inspiration whenever you can. 🙂
    
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Keeping the world immersed in stanza.