How Can It Be?

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I sailed on courageously
Propelled, by a wisp of affection
Spawned by a shade
Of bright evergreen
Uncovered in my ceaseless roaming

It dawned with grace
So fair and eternal
Cradled by sight
As her path curved toward mine

Afflicted
I cascaded ever slightly
Gradually giving way
At each loving verse dispensed

Against the breeze
That carried my voyage
I fondly relinquished
Fogged with hopefulness
Blissfully unaware
So blindly set and sure

3 responses to “How Can It Be?”

  1. Iris Orpi Avatar
    Iris Orpi

    So smooth and sensual, almost breathless. You have imbued nature scenes with all-too-human passion and desire. I also very much loved how you merely hinted that you were headed for some form of heartbreak, but did not exactly end the poem in resolution. Instead it was suspended in weightlessness, returning the focus on your romantic imagery. Smooth!

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    1. loftydreams101 Avatar
      loftydreams101

      Why thank you so much for this thorough critique! I’m glad you enjoyed my work 🙂 – Cheers.

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      1. Iris Orpi Avatar
        Iris Orpi

        The pleasure is all mine. Flow on, and keep taking inspiration whenever you can. 🙂

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Keeping the world immersed in stanza.